Moment in time Reflection
I have been learning to add detail to our writing This is my writing about a moment in time during my holiday. I did a good job at adding detail to my writing because it makes the reader excited.
My next step is to add more detail.
2 comments:
Congratulations Callum on adding very interesting detail. My favourite bit is where you explain why you couldn't concentrate because of what you were seeing and hearing. You also used great vocal.
I really enjoyed reading "your moment in time" - it was such a great explanation that I really did feel like I was there with you.
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